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Artist's CommentsRound 5, page 6. previous page next page That is not science. D: I'm sorry to leave you at a moment like that, but I'll be without computer access till Monday, so see you all next week! Mind your heads. Edit: Fixed some colors. :] Might fix more later. Newt/Raven © =Bilious Fred and Norton © me. Comments
I have this horrible feeling that Norton is going to have an aneurism or something this round.
-- My club: ~Anti-Bashers-United How much of a Mary-Sue is your character? I'm [Nick Fury] in dA's X-Men Evolution crew! THE COGS ARE FREEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!
-- Sword not words. Make way villainy! Hero coming through Live by the sword live a good long life The bigger they are, the harder I hit! I am Alan Alda in dA's Celebrities Crew! Dang, he's never gonna get a break from those darn gears of pain, is he? Haha. |D Loving these last two pages a lot. I dunno if Newt's/Raven's shadow really benefits from being outlined in black like that, I'm on the fence about it, but I think it would've looked neater if it was strictly a purple silhouette? Still don't know, but it immediately entered my head when looking at this.
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The only qwerky thing about this page is the *Hit* SoundFX which could have more impact, maybe Having it in a different color or a bigger, more active font would kick it up a notch. You might even try to add a different background color to add more impact to the entire frame, seeing that someone is getting KO-ed by a blunt object
The next frame is a bit confusing since im seeing your character running into an hazy background, it doesn't have any details as to which section of the room he is running at or where is he running at exactly. Yet the frame, overall, has so much actions, it might not really matter.
As an extra, adding some darker color tones on the assailant, in that frame, might help solidify the fact that he is in front of the camera. (You know, the whole thicker line, more contrast for the object which is closest to the viewer.)
Now as for the last frames, another extra might be adding a sound FX when the guy hits the floor: We see the bump lines, but there isnt that "extra cue" to give us a sense of " BONK!" yet the clockgears are doing a great job in showing his knocked out state
So far, really enjoying your work, wish i could order the compilation but my russian is.....0%, :S but one day ! One day !.
Keep up the great work.
Just a couple of things to note:
In the first panel the background slopes away nicely into a darkened gradient. This lends a real sense of 3D to the image. But in latter panels, particularly panel 6, the image seems to be of an almost uniform shade. You do a teriffic job of portraying lighting with colour, but some darker purples or reds in the shadow would help bring out the drama and tension in this image.
Just another minor point - the flow of action in panel five is fantastic EXCEPT for Norton's head. While the rest of his body is recoiling upwards from Newt's upswing, his head is recoiling downwards as if he'd been hit on the back of the head. If the head were to be tilted backwards and the shoulders dropped, it would make the blow look more powerful.
Other than that, fabulous. I particularly love the cogwheels.
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